anatomy of an ending (draft)

         1
picture a room full
of half-full cardboard boxes
such that you can tell neither
who’s coming
or going –

         2
the afternoon,
following the last show,
it rained and rained
She felt lonely
oh you know the cliche
but it was like a friend moved to another state

“I’m going to be depressed for a week,” she said
to the mirror
to her mother
to her coffee cup

         3
“We can talk optimistically
or we can look at data, at numbers,”
he says to her,
as he removes his glasses.

“I’ve never been good with statistics. I prefer
optimism. You know, there’s always a prayer.”

“I’ve been listening to you for three months now.
Read the text. Look at the facts. It takes two people
to repair a relationship.”

Still, she can’t voice the D-word. Not there.
She says it to her friends
            to her steering wheel
            to her sister.

          4
Writers, maybe especially young writers, seek a perfect ending.
“Don’t make it feel tacked-on,” says the writing coach.
We all want the Fitzgerald finish,
the Joycean moment.
So that, dear reader, you will sigh and languish over our choice
words. Like a lingering touch or a parting too-long-glance.
So we struggle. Make it short? Make it long? Sermonize?
Ask a question? Do something completely unexpected? Make room
for a sequel?
But you, dear reader, can smell a gimmick a mile away. You know us.
You cannot be fooled.
It takes two to participate in the ending.

         5
And so I love you, you weird old Brahmin-type
“There, I’ve said it,” she said
        to the air
        to her pillow
        to no ears in particular

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~ by hannahcsykes on July 2, 2008.

One Response to “anatomy of an ending (draft)”

  1. wow.. this is powerful and beautiful and emotional . it’s one of those things i read and am just blown away.

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